Ash in the Smogon League (a themed warstory)

[JuliusEW]

Sexual humor + Pokemon = not funny...ever.

I believe you forgot this little "gem" of a warstory http://www.smogon.com/forums/showthread.php?t=85126

The battle was pretty good with decent prediction and skill.
8/10

 

[Lone_Prodigy]

When your Muk got KO'ed he should've Shadow Sneak'ed one more time. But otherwise a good warstory.

 

[Benny in a Jet]

Just a little nitpick after the second read-through (like it with the edits ;):

Ah shoot. Stealth rock damage. Stealth rock damage mediated the poison heal health, so.. I just ended up in the same spot.

Mediated: Intervene in a dispute to bring about an agreement or reconciliation

I don't know, I guess I'd use "negated". But still, great warstory. :)

 

[Cloud 8]

I dint really mind the commentary. Lulzy battle=Lulzy commentary. The part that bugged me was the playing. Youre opponent was really ggod and youre predictions were nice but you just made some stupid mistakes like you couldve taken an extra turn to protect the turn after you sen it out; meaning you wouldve definetely lived the aqua jet. I suppose it wouldnt make it this close of a battle so ok. I forgive you ;).

 

[PallyHeroRush52]

Amazing. Brock would be proud of you.

 

[blarajan]

Just a little nitpick after the second read-through (like it with the edits ;):




I don't know, I guess I'd use "negated". But still, great warstory. :)

The word you were looking for was "mitigated."

 

[MobsterMurkrow]

Beastly Muk. 'Nuff said.

 

[purple crobatchop]

The description says the user trips the user with a vine, so physical contact.

Anyways, I liked this. Good commentary, good battle (although the opponent could've played a little better...). You did go a bit overboard with the Brock and kum jokes though. I always loved Ash's Muk though, so thank you for using him :D

8.5/10

But if you look at anime Grass Knot "creates" the vive from ground, and the user does not touch the opponent. Well nvm

Oh yeah, sorry to break the news... Lapras is officially released, and Gliscor's location is unknown...

But nice Warsotry anyway

Team: 9/10
Battle: 9/10
Playing: 9/10
Commentary: 5/10

 

[Rofellos]

I loved it! Especially your choice of pokemon but I'm sad staraptor didn't make it lol. But really well done.

 

[StallMandibuzz]

OMG, someone actually used Muk very effectively! :D The KUM jokes did get old, but overall this was a pretty good Ash-based warstory. Your humor was sorta BLARGGG, but the battle was great. People need to give Muk more love, since no one hardly ever uses it, and it's a pretty good Poke, considering it thrashed two offensive monsters, and crippled Salamence. Luvdisc'ed. Just lay off on the KUM jokes, okay? Y_Y

 

[Percussionist]

Made it half way through, couldn't finish it. I'll try again later, but I could not get past the commentary. Sorry, but it just came off as immature.

 

[Furosuto]

Good battle. You made the right predictions and you knew how to use ash's team effectively. The only nitpick that I have is that it seems near the end you relied on hax to win. Hoping to get burned by scald and gliscor hanging on with 1% health? As you said earlier, aqua jet was doing a average of 45% so it seems like you sorta relied on luck a bit too much there. The commentary on what you're doing wasn't that bad, although I don't think the brock jokes were necessary.

Over all, I think I'll give you 7/10

 

[Darthenos]

Format Format Format Hax Hax Hax. Besides that you captured the theme well and minus the hax in the battle, it was good. You should read http://www.smogon.com/forums/showthread.php?t=30225 just for fun. It is insane