Setup Sweeper Rayquaza [QC 0/2]

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[SET]
Name:Setup Sweeper
Move1:Dragon Dance/Swords Dance
Move2:Dragon Ascent
Move3:Earthquake/V-create
Move4:Extreme Speed
Item;Life Orb
Ability:Air Lock
Nature:Jolly
252 Atk/252 Spe/4 Def
Tera Type:Flying, Fire, Normal

[SET COMMENTS]

• Air lock, Rayquaza’s ability, gets rid of desolate land, and threatens to OHKO Groudon. So, usually, the opponent will switch Pokémon. This allows you to use dragon dance.
• Dragon Dance allows control over Zacian-c, all non-Espeed Arceuses, Yveltal, Eternatus, and Necrozma-U, all of which would OHKO Rayquaza if not for that speed boost
• Earthquake both 2HKOs Primal Groudon weakness and simultaneously 2HKOs Necrozma-DM and OHKOs Zacian-C while maintaining a high speed, whereas V-Create can OHKO Necrozma-DM but cannot do much to a lot of defensive Pokémon without using its Tera type.
• Tera Flying offers lots of offensive power, with a huge boost to Dragon Ascent.Tera Flying on Rayquaza really should only be used on a Groudon, a Kyogre-P ,a Zygarde, an Arceus-Fairy. Tera Fire allows you to gain a huge boost to V-Create, which already has 180 power. You can OHKO Dusk Mane, resist an ice beam from Kyogre, OHKO an Arceus, OHKO a Yveltal, or OHKO a Zamazenta-C. Tera Normal not only boosts Extreme speed, but denies Marshadow’s Spectral Thief and Shadow Sneak. Tera Normal can be used when you’ve been outsped by another pokemon or if you want to kill Marshadow.
• Usually it will be able to use dragon dance in response to a kill by Groudon-Primal, Marshadow, Mewtwo-Mega-Y, or Marshadow.
• Pairs well with Physical Dance Arceus-Poison, as it can easily tank any ice or fairy moves that get used against Rayquaza as well as hitting back hard with poison jab + Poisonium Z.
• Pairs well with Choice Specs Lunala, which can threaten an Extreme Speed Arceus, Giratina-O Shadow Sneak, and all forms of Necrozma, all of which are threats to Rayquaza.

[SET CREDITS]
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[Bobsican]

Hey, that's not how the formatting for an analysis go, please abide by the skeleton provided in the reservation index

 

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Hey, that's not how the formatting for an analysis go, please abide by the skeleton provided in the reservation index

Oh thank you, I forgot the credits. Do I just change that or what exactly would I do to remedy that?

 

[Bobsican]

You'd want to first copy-paste the skeleton provided, then reword accordingly to fit the information within the respective sections, here's an example of how it should look like.

 

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You'd want to first copy-paste the skeleton provided, then reword accordingly to fit the information within the respective sections, here's an example of how it should look like.

I appreciate the help! This is the first time I’ve done this before, so I’m not completely competent with all of the details.

 

[bumboclaat]

Since this is now in the correct format i'll qc this and edit it into this comment when I am done

 

[bumboclaat]

A free turn is doom

add remove comment (as added space / ap added period / ac added comma / rc removed comma)
[SET]
Name:Setup Sweeper
Move1: Dragon Dance / Swords Dance
Move2: Dragon Ascent
Move3: Earthquake / V -Ccreate / Scale Shot
Move4: Earthquake / Extreme Speed / Scale Shot / V-Create Scale Shot is a viable option
Item:; Life Orb
Ability: Air Lock
Nature: Jolly
252 Atk / 252 Spe/ 4 Def 32 HP / 252 Atk / 8 Def / 212 Spe This spread lets Rayquaza live a Mega Salamence Double Edge. It can be
Tera Type: Flying /, Fire /, Normal we use slashes and have a space after each one

[SET COMMENTS]

• Air lock, Rayquaza’s ability, gets rid of desolate land, and threatens to OHKO Primal Groudon after a boost. Primal Groudon is the name So, usually, the opponent will switch Pokémon. This allows you to use dragon dance. This worded very poorly. Rayquaza threatens most of the defensive metagame so it can attempt to boost on the switches it forces. Some examples are Primal Kyogre, Primal Groudon, and Ho-Oh. You should also mention what type of teams it is on (HO and more commonly webs) and the role it plays (wallbreaker and sweeper)
• Dragon Dance allows control over Zacian-c, all non-Espeed Arceuses, Yveltal, Eternatus, and Necrozma-U, all of which would OHKO Rayquaza if not for that speed boost. Dragon Dance enbales Rayquaza to outspeed the entire unboosted metagame. Swords Dance's use on Sticky Web teams should also be mentioned here.
• Earthquake both 2HKOes Primal Groudon weakness and simultaneously 2HKOs Dragon Dance Necrozma-DM defensive NDM is no 2HKOed without a boost. and OHKOs Zacian-C while maintaining a high speed, whereas V-Create can OHKO Necrozma-DM but cannot do much to a lot of defensive Pokémon without using its Tera type. Reword this. Take a look at some other analyses to see how they describe KO thresholds. Also talk about Scale Shot and some Pokemon Rayquaza revenges with Extreme Speed.
• Tera Flying offers lots of offensive power, with a huge boost to Dragon Ascent.Tera Flying on Rayquaza really should only be used on a Groudon, a Kyogre-P ,a Zygarde, an Arceus-Fairy. Tera Fire allows you to gain a huge boost to V-Create, which already has 180 power. You can OHKO Dusk Mane, resist an ice beam from Kyogre, OHKO an Arceus, OHKO a Yveltal, or OHKO a Zamazenta-C. Tera Normal not only boosts Extreme speed, but denies Marshadow’s Spectral Thief and Shadow Sneak. Tera Normal can be used when you’ve been outsped by another pokemon or if you want to kill Marshadow. This entire bullet needs to be rewritten. Talk about the benefits of each tera type. I.e. Flying makes Rayquaza a menace to bulkier teams and 2HKOes Dondozo. For each of the tera types please proprovide at least one c
• Usually Rayquaza it will be able to use Ddragon Ddance moves are capitalized in response to a kill by Groudon-Primal, Marshadow, Mewtwo-Mega-Y, or Marshadow. Rayquaza cannot safely dd on any of these mons except defensive Primal Groudon. Rayquaza can frequently obtain Dragon Dances on defensive Pokemon it forces out such as utility Arceus formes, Primal Kyogre, and Ho-Oh. When you're talking about how to use Rayquaza you should mention how it functions v different teamstyles.
• Rayquaza pPairs well with pPhysical Dance Arceus-Poison, as it can easily tank any ice or fairy moves that get used against Rayquaza as well as hitting back hard with poison jab + Poisonium Z. How does this help Rayquaza at all. Teammates listed should be Pokemon who match up well to those who KO Rayquaza or deal with things Rayquaza cannot.
• Rayquaza pPairs well with Choice Specs Lunala, which can threaten an Extreme Speed Arceus, Giratina-O Shadow Sneak, and all forms of Necrozma, all of which are threats to Rayquaza. Setup Rayquaza does not pair well with Choice Specs Lunala. Talk about the different leads Rayquaza can be paired with on HO then combine with the bullet above.

[SET CREDITS]
Set(s) by:

Written by:
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Quality Checked by:
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https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/bumboclaat.523420/

Grammar Checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/bobsican.434487/

I'll stamp once the changes have been implimented

 

[Bobsican]

Yeah, sorry, but I'm afraid that after some discussion with the QC team, this is being QC rejected (archived and reassigned) at this point, while you may have good intent it's simply clear you lack sufficient knowledge of the (viable) metagame and are just generally rambling about the set without much actual legitimate information, I could even add to the essential full rewrite that bumboclaat is asking for that Air Lock is practically irrelevant for it as it does not check Primal Groudon or Kyogre by having lacking bulk and common weaknesses they can abuse. You also keep going for rather unusual strategies or suggestions that are not remotely mainstream and are simply not within the scope of an analysis either.